I like the Moon Festival the most. There are some reasons. First, we hardly have chances to barbecue, but in the day we can barbecue without worry.And, what is better, when we barbecue, we can watch the clear and bright moon. Besides, we can get together with some relatives, then, I can chat with them that we have not seen for a long time.Thirdly, we can play firework crazily like a child in the night. The firework are so beautiful and splendid that it can catch all our eyes. Last but not least, on the Moon Festival, we can pass a leisure day and have fun. To sum up, my favorite holiday is Moon Festival, and it is also worthy of being expected this year.
雖然沒有什麼離譜的錯誤
回覆刪除但是你有些該逗號的地方都沒有標
所以句意就會有差唷
像in the day we can barbecue without worry
day 後面要有逗號 不然整句變沒動詞
but in the day we can barbecue without worry.
回覆刪除無憂無慮的烤肉??
語意也太奇怪
還不錯不過可以多想一些supporting ideas
回覆刪除為什麼without worry BBQ
回覆刪除firework 可以+S
worry 可數應+s吧 worries
回覆刪除we can play firework crazily like a child in the night. at night會不會比較好?
firework ...fireworkS
回覆刪除是因為平常壓力太大
中秋節放假就可以無悠無慮的玩嗎?
哈哈!你錯了!還有好多功課等著你XDD
I can chat with them that we have not seen for a long time.--> I can chat with them who we had not seen each other for a long time.-->
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