John and Thomas are two very important people in modern history. And they have some similar place. First, they were both born in the 18th century. Then, although they were not born in the same day, they died on the same date. Second, both John and Thomas played important role in American Revolution. Thirdly, John had delegated to the Continental Congress and had been the president of United States . Similarly, Thomas had delegated to the Continental Congress and had been the president of United States . Finally, John studied and practiced law and was the signer of Independence . Likewise, John studied and practiced law and was the signer of Independence . To sum up, I think their most similar place is that they are both great and make many contribution to America .
place 這個也太中文了吧..
回覆刪除born + on (date)
可以多用一些不同的句法表現
born in....born on
回覆刪除delegated 的部分重複了=ˇ=
還不錯 不過第三點怎麼變成thirdly
回覆刪除有點不搭前面的first second
First Second 那些用起來有點單調可以做一些變化
回覆刪除轉折詞可以在用更進階一點的~~~
contribution 是可數 要+s
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